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1.     The purpose of the paragraph was to show how the identities of The Salt March protest, rather than being a simple one, can actually be expanded to include a larger group of people. 

 In a broader sense, the identity could be made larger to include not just Indians living under British rule at that time, but anybody living in an occupied country, or maybe a group of people living in a nation with an overly strict set of laws meant to demean the people, their country, or even their heritage. Also with the response of the British, who resorted to beating up protesters, arrested dissenters, and openly rejected at first the protest and Gandhi, the identity could be made even bigger. In history, both past and present, there have been protests that have followed the mold of Gandhi’s civil disobedience, like Martin Luther King Jr.’s Selma march for example.  So with that, one could also say the protest includes the identity of another group of people; protestors who have peacefully spoken out against a moral injustice law or set of laws, and have been beaten, tortured, killed, gaged etc. in response by those who are currently enforcing those morally injustice set of laws.

2.       The character that should be the focus of the paragraph is “the identity”. 

a.       Focus Topic String – The reason why I am using the Focus Topic String method is because I have identified one character, “the identity”, and I am focusing the paragraph around that one character. 

4.      The identity includes groups who live under laws meant to demean them, their culture, or their heritage. These groups could also contribute to a larger identity; one that includes being arrested, beaten, and rejected. A protest that was similar to this was Martin Luther King Jr’s Selma march. Thus, the identity of the protest is a group of people protesting a law, and then being beaten or killed for it.

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The Identity	…groups who live under laws meant to demean them, their culture, or their heritage.
Identity	…includes being arrested, beaten, and rejected
The Identity	…a group of people protesting a law, and then being beaten or killed for it.

6.       Topic Sentence: The identity of the protest is any group of people who have suffered, or died, because of protesting a law.