Comments for Essay 2

Comments for Essay 2:

*Macrolevel Critiques*

1. Create a precise thesis for each part of the paper and use it to organize and inform the rest of the paper.

2. Less context, more content. The explication is too context heavy. The paper reads like a summary instead of an analysis of the object.

3. Using only one source is not the most credible way to write a persuasive essay. More sources would allow the reader to trust the arguments being made.