Dylan
Deines
2/23/16
Rough
Draft
United
as One Man
The picture to the right was taken
in Vietnam during the Vietnam War. An American pilot was forced to eject from
his plane, which was shot down by enemy forces, and landed in enemy territory,
to which he was then taken as prisoner by the Vietnamese and most likely
directed to a camp where he would join other prisoners of war.
Without any context other than the
information provided above, one obvious reading or interpretation of the photo
follows; If you read this as a photo taken by a citizen of the United States,
or another soldier, we would be forced to interpret the photo as America
propaganda. The pilot, with his head low, darkened by shadows and his hands tied
behind his back makes one believe this photo is trying to capture the mistreatment
of Americans in Vietnam. Already tied up, the woman points a gun at the man’s
back, a seemingly unneeded action, for if you have ever read anything about the
geography of Vietnam you would know there isn’t many places to run; and if you
have ever read anything about the Vietnam war you would know of all the mines
that were used against Americans in the jungle. The picture to an American
would invoke anger, sadness, and pity, it would remind them of a time in this
nation’s era that many have tried to forget.
The truth of the picture, however,
is that it was taken by a Vietnamese photographer and the photograph was “made
into a stamp that both commemorated the deed and circulated the image
throughout North Vietnam” (Young 95). The image was used to boost morale and
protest American involvement in North Vietnam’s goal of independence, and it’s
objective to win a war against a dominant super power, maybe even at the time the dominant super power.
To figure out why this photo was an
important piece of protest, we must first dissect the photo as if we were in the
shoes of a Northern Vietnamese citizen/soldier. The photo has two obvious
characters, the American pilot sporting his American Air Force attire, and the
Vietnamese woman in what appears to be her everyday wear, a hat to protect
herself from the sun, a button up shirt, and some loose pants. The light on the
woman’s face contrasts the darkness that befalls on to the American’s face—straight
away giving the theme of light vs. dark, a theme found commonly in many
religions (the idea of good vs. evil). Next we have to consider the woman
herself. She is short like most Vietnamese woman were, skinny, due probably to
the lack of food available to Vietnam (American bombing aimed to destroy
resources during the war) but yet her face shows determination, concentration
and even dominance over the man that stands in front of her. Then we must compare
her to the man, who is strong, big, whose clothes make him appear official,
American—the enemy. She is just a civilian who was brought in to the war
because everyone in North Vietnam was brought into the war; she probably lacked
any superior training—most definitely received less training than the man she
has been asked to escort, but yet she stands confident, unfazed by the fact
that the man is twice her size. “Thus a small Asian woman has power over a tall
white man: Asia has power over America,” (Young 95).
If we are considering this image to
be a form of protest, we must also consider the rhetorical devices used to make
it effective as such. The most obvious of the three is the photo’s effective
use of pathos. How did Vietnamese citizens/soldiers feel when they saw a small Vietnamese
citizen in control of their “enemy”? Put yourself in their position, what kind
of feelings are provoked?
The Vietnamese felt a sense pride
for their nationality. The picture captures what they aimed to do as a country,
to rise against as a community and fight for sovereignty—for every citizen to
play their part in the war. The photo also invokes confidence. The woman looks unscathed
and strong despite her lacking of physical attributes. If she can stand up to
the big man, why can’t others? This is the mentality that helped Vietnam fight
against America for so long with so much success. The image also invokes
success—a small victory for this woman is a small victory for all of North
Vietnam. With constant bombings of their land, napalm warfare on their jungles,
the Vietnamese watched as their way of lives were destroyed by a superior
force. Citizens were shot down in massacres and war crimes by the Americans saw
many innocent Vietnamese dead. It is hard to see victory, or even want victory,
when you see thousands of people die around you, to feel your entire world
literally being rocked by the aftershocks of bombs. It is the small victories
like the one seen in the photo that kept the North Vietnamese fighting, and why
pathos in the photo is so effective.
If we delve a little further into
the message the photo is conveying we can find ethos being used. Ethos is the
rhetorical strategy that appeals to credibility and character—for this photo
specifically we must analyze the two characters and what one’s actions means
for the other. The Vietnamese woman is the one in power, this is obvious. She
has the gun, the pilot is the one who is tied up, and the facial features of
the women (her head up) shows that she is in control. What does this mean for
her character?
Her character instantly gains
credibility with her power over the pilot, but the message becomes much bigger
and more influential. As discussed before, “a small Asian woman has power over
a tall white man: Asia has power over America.” After looking at this picture
the Vietnamese believed this ideology to be true. The woman’s strong appearance
gives credibility to the entire nation of North Vietnam, not just her specifically;
it gives the North Vietnamese power over America in a seemingly dire situation.
Logos, or the appeal to logic, is a
lot harder to distinguish in the photo, for the image speaks for itself.
However, as discussed already, the image does beg the question—if she can do
it, why can’t others? This in itself is a kind of logic that helps others
viewing the image to gain confidence to do what needs to be done. The war can
logically be won if everyone does their part like the woman in the photograph.
The photograph captures exactly what
Vietnam stood for at the time, a community serious about maintaining their way
of life and doing anything in their power to help reach the ultimate goal of sovereignty—an
ideal that Ho Chi Minh, the face of North Vietnam’s fight for independence,
held dear to his heart. Just like the Americans did during their own struggles
when they were colonists of England, the Vietnamese people collectively
resisted a superpower’s involvement in the war: men, woman, and even children.
Normal citizens went above and beyond to accomplish a dream, and that is what
this picture captures. The image invokes pride, confidence, and success—three
characteristics of a successful campaign, three characteristics that kept the
Vietnamese going in a seemingly endless war for their independence. Ho Chi Minh
couldn’t have ever said it better when he explained, “The Vietnamese
people deeply love independence, freedom and peace. But in the face of United
States aggression they have risen up, united as one man.” The image
captures what the war meant to the North Vietnamese—it inspired hope, it
inspired change, but most of all it inspired rebellion; and as a nation built
on rebellion ourselves, we know how important these factors are in accomplishing the ultimate dream—freedom.
Citation
Young,
Marilyn Blatt., John J. Fitzgerald, and A. Tom. Grunfeld. The Vietnam War: A
History in Documents. Oxford: Oxford UP, 2002. Print
I liked your essay it shows a good description of the picture that was claimed to be Vietnam. I was really surprise that you thought that the image spoke for itself. the logos was interesting but needs a little more detail on how the picture speaks for itself
ReplyDeleteHowdy Dylan,
ReplyDeleteThe use of the word "obvious" in the first sentence of the second paragraph is a little bit tricky, especially if the claim is not in fact obvious to the reader. It would be a good thing if it was not obvious because it allows you to persuade the reader of your interpretation of the photograph. The word "obvious" appears a few more times in the paper. This might not be a very good move because something obvious requires no explanation at all, which would defeat the purpose of writing about it. I think this is a really bizarre and compelling image that does require explanation.
Some of the claims you make in reference to that word are not actually obvious. For example, the use of pathos is not immediately obvious to me, and I think you could argue the positions of power between the Vietnamese woman and American pilot either way, which means her power is not obvious (paragraphs 5 and 7).
I would agree with Mike's comment about the paragraph where you say the picture speaks for itself because it doesn't. Without context, the picture might be confusing.
Another issue is the use of personal pronouns. I was always taught that in essays the use of I, me, we, our, you, your, etc. was not allowed. That may be a personal thing, but in my experience, the lack of personal pronouns tends to make writing sound a little bit more credible.
As far as your analysis is concerned, I think you brought up substantial issues to talk about. This is a good thing because you addressed important details of the photograph that make for a stronger case. I think that the paper might benefit from having a more structured organization. I think you will have a much stronger paper when you package the analysis in the appropriate body paragraphs.
Dylan,
ReplyDeleteThis paper is looking pretty good man! I like how clearly you make your points through the paper. The Vietnamese were trying to lift moral in the war and to show that the Americans could be defeated.
I think you could improve your introduction a bit. If you give a bit more in depth and description of what will happen in the next paragraphs, I think it could add some clarity to your paper. Secondly, I think improving your intro will hook readers into reading your paper.
In your second paragraph you say, “already tied up, the woman points a gun at the man’s back, a seemingly unneeded action,” If you examine the picture closely I would say she is NOT pointing the gun at his back, but the gun is merely in a resting position. Even if she was pointing a gun at his back I don’t think it is an unneeded action. That guy could squash her with nothing but his weight alone.
I agree with the Brenda I think the word “obvious” might be a bit strong in second paragraph. If you’re sure this is an obvious reading of the picture, I highly recommend backing it with at least one more source. Sources are important, I am sure there are plenty of sources on this topic.
Well it's certainly a great start, just do some general sentence clean up and get some more research before you know it your paper will be outstanding! Keep up the good work!
Dear Dylan,
ReplyDeleteI agree with many of the points that our group members have posted. Therefore, I will elaborate further on some of the things that I noticed while reading over your paper.
First, I think you did a great job at describing what is happening in the photograph that you have included. However, I think that like Brenda was saying, many of the “obvious” elements that you point out are not so obvious to someone like me that lacks some of your knowledge on the topic at hand. With that being said, I recommend you think a little bit more about who you believe and wish your audience to be in order to not eliminate some populations by assuming common or obvious knowledge.
Another form of revision that I can suggest would be to read your essay out loud so that you can hear how some of your descriptions of the woman and the man are repetitive. Though they are important and needed to understand the efficacy of the photograph, I think condensing the descriptions to one or two paragraphs and then focusing on the use of rhetorical strategies can help structure and flow your paper a little bit better.
I would like to end by saying that I think you did a great job at picking a topic that has so much that you can write and elaborate on as a form of protest. Keep up the good work!
Thank you for your time,
Saphire Miramontes
Dear Dylan,
ReplyDeleteI would also have to agree with most of my classmates. I really enjoyed reading your essay as well. I liked how you showed both sides of the situation and explained them.
However, I do feel that you should elaborate more in some of the beginning paragraphs as well. I think you should talk more about the the topics you wrote as obvious because many are unaware of the subject.
Your organization does not need much improvement except for a little more explanation. I also found a couple of grammar errors but nothing that cannot be fixed after reading it again.
Revision plan:
ReplyDeleteRevision plan:
-Taking out personal pronouns.
-Revise intro/context.
-Image on top.
-Logos, put more ethos. Rosie the Riveter.