Andrew
Koleski
2/23/16
Rough
Draft
Dr.
Brown
“Anti-Apartheid Movement” Poster
At the top of the page is a poster made
by the “Anti-Apartheid Movement”, a group based in the U.K. dedicated to
raising awareness of apartheid in South Africa. More specifically, this group is
using the object to protest The 1967 Terrorism Act. This piece of legislation
gave the authorities the power to “detain people indefinitely without
disclosing where they were being held” (Michigan State University) Using
pathos, logos, and ethos, this poster demonstrates to its audience how vital it
is to help the “Anti-Apartheid Movement” so they can stop the system of racism
in South Africa.
Throughout history, there have been
many examples of injustice in the world. Many things can spring to mind once
the word “injustice” is said, such as slavery, war, murder, etc. However, none of
those words seems to be conjoined with “injustice” quite like racism. For many
people, especially in the United States, is seen as a great evil that still
persists today, whether it is a part of police brutality, or preconceived
notions of different races. In fact, as recent as 2015, nearly half the
population of the country “say racism is a big problem in society today.”
(Soichet) However, the United States is not the only country to experience
racism, and a sad example of this can be found in the history of apartheid in
South Africa.
A definition of apartheid could go
something like this: It was a system of racial segregation, and “political and economic
discrimination” against those that were not of European descent (Webster), even
though the majority of those living in South Africa were black. (Stanford) This system was adopted nationwide in 1948,
when the National Party took control of the country. (BBC News) For the next 80
plus years, the country operated under a system of apartheid. Throughout this
time, the government cracked down on protesters and opposing parties and other
leaders, such as Nelson Mandela, were jailed. (BBC News) Eventually, Mandela
was released and later elected leader of South Africa. (BBC News) However, that
does not excuse the shameful history of apartheid in South Africa.
A strategy used in the object would definitely
be pathos. Since the group knows that corruption and abuse of power stirs
strong feelings in people, the poster wastes little time in attempting to shape
the public’s perception of the policeman shown in the photo. “…He can question
them in secret for as long as he likes…” (Michigan State University) the
caption on the photo says. With this sentence, the poster is trying to convince
the audience that 1.) The policeman is up to no good and that 2.) This particular
policeman would have no problem abusing his power. This second point is driven
home by what is said after the first quote: “…And cannot be forced to account
for any of his actions.” (Michigan State University) With that statement, the
poster is letting the audience know that if they don’t do something quick, this
evil man will “get away with it”.
However, the object at hand does not
only use pathos but logos as well. It does this by appealing to the audiences
reasoning, more specifically in relation the job of a policemen. For many
people, the police are meant to protect and take of their citizens. Make sure
everybody is safe, stop criminals from stealing, calming down people and deescalating
situations. How strange then, that this particular person is not referred to as
a policeman once in the entire caption. Instead, the poster refers to his as a “versatile
gentleman” that “with his many colleagues, arrests around 3,000 Africans every
day”. (Michigan State University) This quote could make the audience do a double
take and ask themselves questions, such as what
makes this man so versatile? Why has the author used this word? Is it a bad
thing? Further down, though, is where the audience may really start to
think about what is going on, and might begin to question the policeman’s
authority through reasoning and logic. If
he is a policeman, why is he traveling in a group with colleagues? Shouldn’t he
be able to do his job alone? Also, why is he arresting 3,000 people a day? Isn’t
that too much? The strongest use of logos, however, comes when the poster
states “…at least 15 people have died under his ‘questioning’ (Michigan State
University) in the past several years. Surely, a policeman doing routine
questioning shouldn’t be killing anyone? It’s moments like this, as well as the
others, where the object is attempting to shape the audience’s opinion through
logos.
Though it may not seem like it at
first, along with its appeal to emotion, reason. Logic, rationality, &
evidence, the poster also uses ethos to some degree. While it may seem to be
criticizing authority itself, one way to interpret the object would be to say
it simply replaces one type of authority with another. In the poster, as
mentioned before, a policeman is pictured while an unflattering characterization
is made by a caption next to him. However, without the authority of the police
to relay on the poster addresses its audience directly by telling them what has
happened, and what to do about it; “This is South Africa’s police state. This
is how apartheid is enforced. Help us work toward ending it. Join the
Anti-Apartheid Movement” (Michigan State University) Having said this, the
poster seems to leave all of the power, and authority, in the hands of the
audience. With injustice rampant in South Africa, and a police force not to be
trusted, it is up to them, and those that have been informed of the situation, to
join the movement that will help end apartheid in the African country.
Apartheid was a shameful time in
history for South Africa and its people, much like segregation and racism in
recent American history. However, it is important to note that in time of
frustration, hatred, and bigotry there was always those ready to fight it. In
the poster, the “Anti-Apartheid movement successfully used the rhetorical strategies
of pathos, logos, and ethos to sway their audience into not only thinking about the injustice of
apartheid, but perhaps a way to end it.
Works
Cited
Michigan State University “A South African Policement, Judge, and
Executioner:." African Activist Archive. Michigan State University,
n.d. Web. 08 Feb. 2016.
Soichet, Catherine E. "Racism Is a 'big Problem' to More Americans,
Poll Finds." CNN. Cable News Network, 25 Nov. 2015. Web. 24 Feb. 2016.
BBC News "South Africa Profile - Timeline - BBC News." BBC News. BBC, 25
June 2015. Web. 24 Feb. 2016.
Stanford "The History of Apartheid in South Africa." Students.standford.edu.
Stanford, n.d. Web. 24 Feb.
2016.
Webster "Apartheid / Definition of Apartheid." Merriam-Webster.
Merriam-Webster, n.d. Web. 24 Feb. 2016.
The obvious strengths in this paper is how well, at least in my opinion, it details out ethos, pathos and logos for the rhetorical object. However some of the transitions between ideas, paragraph to paragraph, weren't as fluid as they could've been. The second to last paragraph where you introduce ethos had a longer introduction than needed. Also during your logos argument although I understand how you might perceive it as logical, it feels too similar to pathos so maybe that paragraph needs a different approach in order to separate your pathos from logos.
ReplyDeleteOne thing I found that was unclear to me was who the audience was for this object. You kept talking about how it affected the audience with pathos, logos or ethos but I never really got an explanation as to who they were. You offer a lot of good historical background so the context I need to understand the rhetorical situation is provided but the specific "identity" and "audience" isn't very obvious throughout the essay. Spend more time, perhaps with evidence if possible, to weave it in to your paragraphs.
Another thing missing in this essay is your analysis of whether the object was successful. Your history gives us enough information to see that the movement against apartheid was successful but not whether the object contributed to it.
Into was great, thank you for explaining your protest right away and for creating a clear thesis-good. It was easy for me as a reader to understand.
ReplyDeleteIn your next two paragraphs, outlining the background and context of the protest, I got a little lost. You spent 6 sentences explaining injustice and its various examples, but then very little text was used to explain apartheid and nothing was explained in terms of the 1967 terrorism act. In the beginning of the paper it seemed as if the 1967 act was a large theme, and then it wasn't mentioned again, so that confused me. As a reader, I had no idea what apartheid and the 1967 terrorism act were, and as a writer you did not explain that well enough to me. I would cut the sentences on injustice and instead fill that up with more historical context/explanations of apartheid.
Explanation of rhetorical strategies was solid, and the only thing I would fix about the last paragraphs of your paper would be the conclusion. It felt just a teeny bit rushed to me, like you were trying to cram four pages of text into 3 sentences. I would add just a sentence or two going into more detail.
Ex: Instead of just saying "the rhetorical strategies of ethos pathos, and logos..."
What specific emotional appeal? What specific logical appeal?
Overall very solid paper
Okay, so thank you for all the comments and also the advice given in the comments. For my final draft, I have decided to make some changes to my paper.
ReplyDeleteFirst off, I feel that the second paragraph needs either some major revision, or shouldn't be here at all. After reading your comments, as well as the professor's, it seems that I was only successful in 1.)confusing the reader, 2.) talking about a country that really didn't have to do with my main subject and 3.) making the purpose of the paper very hard to understand.
Also, after reading your comments, and talking with Professor Brown, I have decided to scrap any plans I had with Pathos, as it seems many of you were confused as to how the object even used Pathos. Instead, I will touch up that paragraph to talk more about Logos.
Finally, I will be working on my conclusion, as it was rather short and could benefit from being a little longer, more concise, and to make it feel not as rushed.
Thank you very much for the help!
Andrew