Tuesday, February 23, 2016

Apartheid Rough Draft



Andrew Koleski

2/23/16

Rough Draft

Dr. Brown
“Anti-Apartheid Movement” Poster

 http://kora.matrix.msu.edu/files/50/305/32-131-34E-98-AAM%20poster%207%20small.jpg

At the top of the page is a poster made by the “Anti-Apartheid Movement”, a group based in the U.K. dedicated to raising awareness of apartheid in South Africa. More specifically, this group is using the object to protest The 1967 Terrorism Act. This piece of legislation gave the authorities the power to “detain people indefinitely without disclosing where they were being held” (Michigan State University) Using pathos, logos, and ethos, this poster demonstrates to its audience how vital it is to help the “Anti-Apartheid Movement” so they can stop the system of racism in South Africa.
Throughout history, there have been many examples of injustice in the world. Many things can spring to mind once the word “injustice” is said, such as slavery, war, murder, etc. However, none of those words seems to be conjoined with “injustice” quite like racism. For many people, especially in the United States, is seen as a great evil that still persists today, whether it is a part of police brutality, or preconceived notions of different races. In fact, as recent as 2015, nearly half the population of the country “say racism is a big problem in society today.” (Soichet) However, the United States is not the only country to experience racism, and a sad example of this can be found in the history of apartheid in South Africa.
A definition of apartheid could go something like this: It was a system of racial segregation, and “political and economic discrimination” against those that were not of European descent (Webster), even though the majority of those living in South Africa were black. (Stanford)  This system was adopted nationwide in 1948, when the National Party took control of the country. (BBC News) For the next 80 plus years, the country operated under a system of apartheid. Throughout this time, the government cracked down on protesters and opposing parties and other leaders, such as Nelson Mandela, were jailed. (BBC News) Eventually, Mandela was released and later elected leader of South Africa. (BBC News) However, that does not excuse the shameful history of apartheid in South Africa.
A strategy used in the object would definitely be pathos. Since the group knows that corruption and abuse of power stirs strong feelings in people, the poster wastes little time in attempting to shape the public’s perception of the policeman shown in the photo. “…He can question them in secret for as long as he likes…” (Michigan State University) the caption on the photo says. With this sentence, the poster is trying to convince the audience that 1.) The policeman is up to no good and that 2.) This particular policeman would have no problem abusing his power. This second point is driven home by what is said after the first quote: “…And cannot be forced to account for any of his actions.” (Michigan State University) With that statement, the poster is letting the audience know that if they don’t do something quick, this evil man will “get away with it”.
However, the object at hand does not only use pathos but logos as well. It does this by appealing to the audiences reasoning, more specifically in relation the job of a policemen. For many people, the police are meant to protect and take of their citizens. Make sure everybody is safe, stop criminals from stealing, calming down people and deescalating situations. How strange then, that this particular person is not referred to as a policeman once in the entire caption. Instead, the poster refers to his as a “versatile gentleman” that “with his many colleagues, arrests around 3,000 Africans every day”. (Michigan State University) This quote could make the audience do a double take and ask themselves questions, such as what makes this man so versatile? Why has the author used this word? Is it a bad thing? Further down, though, is where the audience may really start to think about what is going on, and might begin to question the policeman’s authority through reasoning and logic. If he is a policeman, why is he traveling in a group with colleagues? Shouldn’t he be able to do his job alone? Also, why is he arresting 3,000 people a day? Isn’t that too much? The strongest use of logos, however, comes when the poster states “…at least 15 people have died under his ‘questioning’ (Michigan State University) in the past several years. Surely, a policeman doing routine questioning shouldn’t be killing anyone? It’s moments like this, as well as the others, where the object is attempting to shape the audience’s opinion through logos.
Though it may not seem like it at first, along with its appeal to emotion, reason. Logic, rationality, & evidence, the poster also uses ethos to some degree. While it may seem to be criticizing authority itself, one way to interpret the object would be to say it simply replaces one type of authority with another. In the poster, as mentioned before, a policeman is pictured while an unflattering characterization is made by a caption next to him. However, without the authority of the police to relay on the poster addresses its audience directly by telling them what has happened, and what to do about it; “This is South Africa’s police state. This is how apartheid is enforced. Help us work toward ending it. Join the Anti-Apartheid Movement” (Michigan State University) Having said this, the poster seems to leave all of the power, and authority, in the hands of the audience. With injustice rampant in South Africa, and a police force not to be trusted, it is up to them, and those that have been informed of the situation, to join the movement that will help end apartheid in the African country.
Apartheid was a shameful time in history for South Africa and its people, much like segregation and racism in recent American history. However, it is important to note that in time of frustration, hatred, and bigotry there was always those ready to fight it. In the poster, the “Anti-Apartheid movement successfully used the rhetorical strategies of pathos, logos, and ethos to sway their audience into  not only thinking about the injustice of apartheid, but perhaps a way to end it.


Works Cited
Michigan State University “A South African Policement, Judge, and Executioner:." African Activist Archive. Michigan State University, n.d. Web. 08 Feb. 2016.


Soichet, Catherine E. "Racism Is a 'big Problem' to More Americans, Poll Finds." CNN. Cable News Network, 25 Nov. 2015. Web. 24 Feb. 2016.


BBC News "South Africa Profile - Timeline - BBC News." BBC News. BBC, 25 June 2015. Web. 24 Feb. 2016.


Stanford "The History of Apartheid in South Africa." Students.standford.edu. Stanford, n.d. Web. 24 Feb. 2016.


Webster "Apartheid / Definition of Apartheid." Merriam-Webster. Merriam-Webster, n.d. Web. 24 Feb. 2016.




3 comments:

  1. The obvious strengths in this paper is how well, at least in my opinion, it details out ethos, pathos and logos for the rhetorical object. However some of the transitions between ideas, paragraph to paragraph, weren't as fluid as they could've been. The second to last paragraph where you introduce ethos had a longer introduction than needed. Also during your logos argument although I understand how you might perceive it as logical, it feels too similar to pathos so maybe that paragraph needs a different approach in order to separate your pathos from logos.

    One thing I found that was unclear to me was who the audience was for this object. You kept talking about how it affected the audience with pathos, logos or ethos but I never really got an explanation as to who they were. You offer a lot of good historical background so the context I need to understand the rhetorical situation is provided but the specific "identity" and "audience" isn't very obvious throughout the essay. Spend more time, perhaps with evidence if possible, to weave it in to your paragraphs.

    Another thing missing in this essay is your analysis of whether the object was successful. Your history gives us enough information to see that the movement against apartheid was successful but not whether the object contributed to it.

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  2. Into was great, thank you for explaining your protest right away and for creating a clear thesis-good. It was easy for me as a reader to understand.

    In your next two paragraphs, outlining the background and context of the protest, I got a little lost. You spent 6 sentences explaining injustice and its various examples, but then very little text was used to explain apartheid and nothing was explained in terms of the 1967 terrorism act. In the beginning of the paper it seemed as if the 1967 act was a large theme, and then it wasn't mentioned again, so that confused me. As a reader, I had no idea what apartheid and the 1967 terrorism act were, and as a writer you did not explain that well enough to me. I would cut the sentences on injustice and instead fill that up with more historical context/explanations of apartheid.

    Explanation of rhetorical strategies was solid, and the only thing I would fix about the last paragraphs of your paper would be the conclusion. It felt just a teeny bit rushed to me, like you were trying to cram four pages of text into 3 sentences. I would add just a sentence or two going into more detail.
    Ex: Instead of just saying "the rhetorical strategies of ethos pathos, and logos..."
    What specific emotional appeal? What specific logical appeal?

    Overall very solid paper

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  3. Okay, so thank you for all the comments and also the advice given in the comments. For my final draft, I have decided to make some changes to my paper.

    First off, I feel that the second paragraph needs either some major revision, or shouldn't be here at all. After reading your comments, as well as the professor's, it seems that I was only successful in 1.)confusing the reader, 2.) talking about a country that really didn't have to do with my main subject and 3.) making the purpose of the paper very hard to understand.

    Also, after reading your comments, and talking with Professor Brown, I have decided to scrap any plans I had with Pathos, as it seems many of you were confused as to how the object even used Pathos. Instead, I will touch up that paragraph to talk more about Logos.

    Finally, I will be working on my conclusion, as it was rather short and could benefit from being a little longer, more concise, and to make it feel not as rushed.

    Thank you very much for the help!
    Andrew

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