Mike Gonzalez
I Have A Dream Analysis
Throughout all time
there has been a lot of protest. All
these arguments have been read spoken heard and seen. A lot of them are strikes
petitions critics and historical rights.
I’m going to analyze one of my favorites the I Have A Dream speech by Dr.
King.
The Issue of this speech was based on one
man’s dream to give equal rights to the African Americans. Martin Luther King led a civil rights movement
trying to get African Americans equal rights
like white people. Kind decided to go to
DC and give a motivational speech he called it I Have A Dream. This speech was biased because it was tying
to give people with all races equal rights.
This speech targeted all Americans specially whites so they all knew how
the African Americans felt towards the discrimination against. The thesis of the speech is to give equality
rights to African Americans. This is a
policy argument because it has to do with civil rights. The argument is
structured as a speech.
Martin’s character is loyal kind and honest. This person is standing up or the others that
coward. Being a well-known leader who
was thrown in jail twice and used the no violence technique. Being a role model for us today. He is an
inspiration to many people. Even after he was assassinated he still a good role
model.
Dr. King supports his claim by saying that a
century before then all Negros was freed from slavery. But they are still not completely free
because they still get discriminated. With all the prejudice, white people
picking on them and killing the ones who stood up for them. A couple supporters may feel really bad
towards them but they also get the feeling of hope for the future. Future wit
equal rights.
Based on my analysis of the speech I think it
changed history. The evidence of the
civil war to civil rights supported it. All the way from slavery to
discrimination. Giving to a better
future with equal rights rights for every race giving hope to the audience.
You did a good job at relating the MLK speech to the historical contexts. You gave me your audience, and I agree that this speech was meant to persuade white Americans that the civil rights movement was a moral movement, but I felt that you left out how it influenced the black community which would have been the main audience for this speech. In your rewrite make sure you go over all the possible identities and audiences this speech would have targeted to give us a more complete analysis of the protest.
ReplyDeleteI also didn't see the essay bring up ethos, pathos and logos, or at least not directly. Starting from your third paragraph you begin talking about Dr.Martin Luther King Jr's character and his background. This can all be considered an argument for ethos and how the speech, or its orator, had the qualifications to be a representation of the movement. There are also plenty of pathos within the speech itself which should be talked about in order to get a better image of how the speech was taken and what its implications were.
In terms of evidence you might consider finding more sources that perhaps directly quote MLK or members of the movement and their thoughts on the speech. In a paper of this length one source seems like too little to create a satisfactory argument on such a big speech.
One thing I'd suggest not doing is going off topic from the actual object. You want to focus on the speech and the elements of the speech. In your paragraphs you start talking about what MLK said about slavery and discrimination, but you provide no quote with evidence and it doesn't get tied back in with the speech.
I think what you should do is use specific lines in the speech and do close readings of them in order to prove some of the ideas MLK was trying to point out and sort them out into ethos,logos and pathos.
I thought you did a good job in the article. I agree with Frank, ethos, pathos and logos needs to be identified with more clarity. As well with more quotes. I would break it up into paragraphs with ethos, pathos, and logos, in no particular order. You did do a good job of giving us background on who Dr. King was and what made him special.
ReplyDeleteThis was a pretty interesting paper. Starting with the stuff I liked, I think you did a good job of stating what the object was, the problem that was being addressed, and why it was important.
ReplyDeleteHowever, I feel like there where problems as well. The main one was the focus of the essay. When talking about the thesis and structure, I think you focused too much on the speech and not on your own essay. I say this because it seems you focused on the thesis as what MLK wanted to say, and not as a format or starting point for your own paper. Like Frank, I also noted the lack of Ethos, Pathos, and Logos. However, he has already talked about it, so I'll move on. The third thing I would like to address as to do with the pacing of the essay.To me, it felt very rushed at parts, as you stated facts but didn't really go into how that tied into the point you where making.
For revisions, I would say 1.)try to identify a thesis and talk about how it works with the MLK speech, and 2.)focus more on your own thesis rather than the thesis of the speech you are writing about. Finally, I would encourage you to use your thesis to better explain how ethos, pathos, and ethos where used within MLK's speech and where.
to revise my paper i have to do a complete rewrite of the whole paper with strong thesis and correct organization.
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